User talk:Charlier118/sandbox

Great Job! However, instead of using words like nowadays and today use years so that in case the information changes the wikpedia page is still relevant and clear as to when this is all occurring. Since you are talking about the rise of internet celebrities, you should talk more about when internet celebrities began to arise and expand the topic to more platforms than just youtube. You have a good use of sources and data. Lorenaramirezl (talk) 19:23, 31 March 2019 (UTC)

You should add some hyperlinks to your article. YouTube for example.SocksOfDeath (talk) 15:53, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Good job on the work! You can use the reuse function for the 3rd source instead of cite it again as the 4th source.ChristalCao (talk) 15:59, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

I think you do a really good job of giving context and statistics. Maybe give more specific examples of the things you are talking about — Preceding unsigned comment added by Wohlina (talk • contribs) 16:02, 3 April 2019 (UTC) Great information. You can link your main point to extend your topic. Also, it will be perfect if you bold your headline.Samuelzhao000005 (talk) 16:04, 3 April 2019 (UTC)Samuelzhao000005

You can provide more specific examples to you idea. For example, the Kardashian family will be a good example to use to exoand more on your topic.Koko413 (talk) 16:07, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

The statistics you provide are really useful and the page is fact driven. You have a good amount of sources but I think if you added some hyperlinks it would make the page even stronger. Isabelleshegog (talk) 16:18, 3 April 2019 (UTC)Isabelle

Great use of citations! It goes to show that you have done your research and are actually providing a well-informed article to the reader. I would consider using more hyperlinks, whether that be through a photo or through a hyperlink to a correlating Wiki page. In addition, I would also consider including more examples of celebrities this article would relate to. Otherwise, a job well done so far! Jaredgoz (talk) 16:23, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Very interesting topic and great job on making your page really detailed. I also like how you included a unique image for your audience. I suggest maybe including more information for your caption of Vidcon (for example what it is, how often it takes place, etc.) I would also maybe include some hyperlinks for words like "social media", and "Youtube." Otherwise, great job! Fariha34 (talk) 16:34, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

I like how your article is fact driven and includes little excessive words. --Jasonkung22 (talk) 16:37, 3 April 2019 (UTC)Jasonkung22

You used a lot of citation, which is good. You indicated the name of the page you're editing but you didn't add a hyperlink to it and nor the subsections you are adding to it. Another thing that I think needs to be explained is what is "Vidcon". I can see a picture of the event (?), but you didn't explain what it is and other characteristics about it.Rafamatalon1234 (talk) 01:09, 4 April 2019 (UTC)

Looking good! I think you meant to hyperlink the original Wikipedia article at the beginning of your piece but forgot to? So make sure you do this. In your first sentence, make sure that you avoid speaking subjectively. When you say "many people," you are making your own judgements on the magnitutde of the internet celebrity trend, whether you mean to or not. Are there really "many" people who create videos, sketches, etc? How many? You could find a specific statistic instead to help illustrate your point. For ex., "According to ____, millions of individuals nowadays" (I really have no idea, I made that statistic up.). Lastly, delete the dash after "you" in "Youtubers" in your fifth sentence, and the "it is proven" in your second-to-last sentence. Great job at this though! Isamouse79 (talk) 03:44, 5 April 2019 (UTC)

Good job! I would just expand on some things that not everyone will know about, like Vidcon. Also, add some more links if you can! Sydneycurrie5 (talk) 20:40, 7 April 2019 (UTC)