User talk:Charlottewallace/sandbox

Your outline is well organize and I would suggest working closely with the other student doing this article. You both have very similar ideas in your respective outlines and I think some collaboration work would help facilitate the editing of the article. I do notice that you have a lot more resources and those can help you add more and research more. I really like your proposal to add a community and culture section because that is possibly one of the main things that people are looking for when they search other cultural identities, I feel like they want to know more about cultural aspects. I would like to know more about the literature review part, and what the main focus of that section would be? I would also suggest the possibility of an organization section, under the museums part. I think finding organizations for Cambodian Americans and giving links would also help facilitate research opportunities for those visiting/reading the article. Luzaguirre (talk) 07:34, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

Good start, and good intro. The history section gets the information across without an overload of data; I wouldn't add too much more to it. Instead, I think it would be beneficial to now focus on the Culture & Communities section you have in your outline. This is probably what you have in mind, but maybe give information as to how Cambodian American communities interact and thrive/struggle within the U.S. cities you mentioned. Instead of lengthening the introductory paragraph, I think it would be an improvement to discuss the subjects mentioned in it (trouble assimilating, lack of health care, etc) in further sections. Providing more current information on Cambodian Americans as of present day would be the most important thing to add to your article, although I know it can be harder to find resources on this. I liked your use of quantitative data, which is something I think I should add to my article. Caetanomk (talk) 05:09, 25 October 2016 (UTC)