User talk:Chase503/sandbox

Hi Josh! Your article draft has a lot of good information! Your sources show clear, neutral information about Otter Rock and some of the places located in this community. Your sections are also organized in a good fashion. I enjoyed the fact that you added more information about the population and its location. I also enjoyed reading more about the Otter Rock Marine Reserve and some of the activities that take place in this community. One piece that I would maybe expand would be the Flying Dutchman Winery. When I looked at the source http://www.dutchmanwinery.com/, I found some info about some of the history of the winery, and some info about where they get their grapes from and how they make their wines. I think these pieces of information might be useful in the article. Another thing that I've been advised to refrain from is the use of the word "you" in Wikipedia articles, which I found one or two of in your draft. These can make the information bias because you are putting a perspective into the article. For example, "You can access the beach by trails " could be changed to something like "The beach can be accessed by means of trails" or something like that, making it neutral. I also liked the fact that you added links to other Wikipedia articles to your article, further explaining a piece of information you are stating, as my article could use some of those. JensenByler (talk) 05:46, 14 February 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review
Hello!

You have a lot of good information here, and it was a nice catch to spot the outdated information on the climate!

Some feedback/questions:
 * How do some of the images relate to in the article? I didn't see any mentions of otters (the animal) in your information, and I know you mentioned wine tasting, but why choose to include the image of a wine glass out of all the activities (especially when it doesn't seem to stand out from the rest)? The image of the tide pools is great, though it'd do better next to the "Otter Rock Marine Reserve" section.
 * The inclusion of the zip code in the lead seems redundant since in the main article it's listed in the information part on the right and isn't too critical of information.
 * The "Local Activities" section has a lot of interesting information! I would be careful, though, because it seems like too much info.; it sounds a little brochure- or tourist-like, listing out all the destinations someone could visit. WikiLinking to the locations is already enough, too, so we don't really need the exact locations of the places.
 * I spotted some interesting sections you might be able to add when browsing other Wikipedia articles about cities, like "Points of Interest" or more about the "Geography."

You're making a lot of good progress and what you have is very interesting! :) Yemlee (talk) 06:24, 14 February 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review
Hi,

You have quite an addition to contribute to an otherwise nearly empty article. I would say you did a great job formatting and organizing the information listed, making it very easy for readers to follow along. I think all of the content you have added is relevant to the topic and seems unbiased. The images you have added seem mostly relevant as well. Most of your sources seem legitimate and trustworthy.

I honestly don't have a lot of immediate concerns regarding your draft. I would agree with Yemlee in regards to the picture of the wine glass. While moderately relevant, I feel it doesn't really fit in very well with the article as a whole. I think possibly expanding on local activities (if possible) or maybe adding more detail regarding the marine reserve (especially the otters) might be a good idea. Maybe if there were local landmarks or things to see in particular would be a good thing to look into. Not even necessarily in Otter Rock, but possibly conveniently located nearby.I think this would likely be a good addition to the local activities section.

Otherwise I think you've done an amazing job with this article so far, and I look forward to seeing the finished product!

Nayyomii (talk) 07:29, 14 February 2019 (UTC)

Nicole's feedback on article draft
Hi, Chase!

You have some really useful information here, and how you are organizing it so far makes sense/reads smoothly. Some strengths I'm noticing in this draft are:
 * good range of sections and level of detail within them
 * great range of sources
 * the history section moves clearly through changes to this space chronologically,
 * good linking out to other wikipedia articles
 * tone is consistently neutral

Some things to consider as you continue improving this article are:
 * be careful to link every statement of fact to a source, and some of the sources aren't yet in reflist format, which you'll want to update before finalizing this article
 * lead should more fully preview the key article sections
 * in the local activities section in particular, look for and remove "you" language (encyclopedia entries don't point out to the reader in the pronouns they use)
 * where can these sections be expanded? What other information have you encountered that might still be added?

I hope these notes are helpful, and I look forward to seeing the final version of this!Nicoleccc (talk) 22:52, 14 February 2019 (UTC)