User talk:Chaseshea/sandbox

All of your edits to the article are logical and seem beneficial to the readers experience. I think you spend a lot of time in the background section which is good. Your information about her exigence for writing seems very important to your page. I think since the background section is so short, its definitely helpful for you to make all of the changes you suggested. Also, since you didn't necessarily copy and paste the article, I'd just make sure that the flow of the background section makes sense for the reader. You talk about her reasons for writing, and also bring up background to certain parts within the book. Moving to the character section, I think your addition to the main character was definitely helpful. It was weird to see Uncle Anoosh had a longer description than the actual main character. I also agree adding background to the parents and noting their financial status helps a play a role in the story. Overall really good additions, just make sure everything flows logically within the text. Bms141 (talk) 18:38, 15 April 2019 (UTC)bms141

The Background section of the Persepolis article was extremely short so it definitely needed improvements, which is why I also worked on the Background section a lot. Most of your contributions add to that section, which will very much improve the content of the entire article. I like that you are going to add information about the name Persepolis, because adding information about the title is always helpful to the understanding of the reader. I also think it is beneficial to include an image of Satrapi, so the reader can picture her in real-life (not just in drawings), and that is something I did not think of. The Character List also needed some changes to be made (which I didn't work on) so it was good that you did. It is smart of you to cut down Uncle Annosh's character description, because it was too long and had the most information out of any other character. I also like your description of Marji - it is factual and to the point. The Analysis section could also use a bit more information, so it is good you are planning to add to it. It also didn't previously contain any information regarding the veil, which is surprising because it is a big part of the graphic novel. Gabriellam19 (talk) 19:00, 15 April 2019 (UTC)Gabriellam19