User talk:Chefmary01

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Instructor Feedback for Draft
Good start to adding some contributions to the existing article on Long-distance_relationship. I think the biggest area for improvement is how your work can integrate into the existing article content. There seems to be some redundancies especially with the existing article section called "means of staying contact." In the lead section make sure to add citations when you mention that "there is currently research being done..." Also, avoid using descriptions about your own writing or process such as "that I used in my content." In the background section you referred to LDR as a theory, but this term is not a theory at all, rather a type of relating. I think it's possible to describe the history of LDR without having to use a since the beginning of time type argument. Instead, describe how the study of LDR developed and how the terms became more widely used and studied. Sections 1 and 2 will need more development and making sure it is unique from content on the existing article. Section 3 has a lot of good information from sources, but the content seems disparate and does not hang together. Try to organize information by sub-topic or theme and use sources that speak to that area of content rather than mixing themes into one paragraph. The application section needs more depth and elaboration. If you expand your content sections by discussing more of the current research on using technology to maintain relationships then you might not need the application section because you are describing research in the content sections instead of the application section. I think the critique section needs to be clarified. Are you suggesting a critique of how LDRs are studied, the conceptualization of LDRs, or the findings from recent research? It appears that Acedera and Yeoh (2018) are describing some challenges that couples face when using technology, which is good information, but I'm wondering how this fits in the critique section. Remember to use proper APA style for in-text citations and reference section entries. Jrpederson (talk) 15:00, 13 October 2020 (UTC)