User talk:Chefmary01/Long-distance relationship

Peer Review
The article does a very good job of defining long distance relationships and highlighting how technology has affected these types of relationships--both romantic and platonic. I was specifically impressed by the “LDR evolving with technology” section. This brought to light how although the research around technology and LDR is relatively recent, this concept has been around for quite some time.

After reading the entire article, I would suggest that this could be titled something more specific than only “Long-Distance Relationship.” Since there is such a focus on how technology comes into play regarding the maintenance of LDRs, the title could potentially change to “Long-Distance Relationships and Technology” or something of that nature.

There were some instances in the beginning of the article where it seemed like scholarly information was paraphrased, but no citation was provided. If ideas were pulled from resources you found, you’ll need to go back in and add the citations (I’ll mark specifically which ones made me think this in your Sandbox). Since Wikipedia is built like an encyclopedia, all information has to be cited and checked to guarantee its accuracy. Similarly, in your background section, you mentioned “I felt that this would be an area…” This leans more toward opinion than fact for Wikipedia and will need to be rephrased with factual information.

“Section Two of Technology Influencing LDR Family Relationships” could use some additional information and sources to substantiate the section more. However, I did notice in the full article on Wikipedia that there is a section called “Sustaining Family Relationship.” Is this where you were wanting to add this information?

The most important thing that could be done to improve this article is to double check your current citations and add citations within your article if you paraphrased or took an idea from another source that you read. This will boost the credibility and reliability of the information in the article. Also, were you planning on incorporating some research study cases into your article? This might help substantiate some of the claims as well.

Throughout the article, there are some grammatical errors that detract from the article. Under “Section One” there is a fragment that needs to be edited to form a complete sentence(“the boundaries of these though thousands of miles away (Bacigalupe, Lambe, 2011)). I would also suggest making all citations look the same (i.e. some of your references have the authors in all capital letters and some only have the first letter of the last name capitalized) so there is consistency in format and organization of the article.

Overall, I enjoyed the information you provided in this article and would suggest adding citations and fixing some grammatical errors/syntax. I also recommend the below article for more information on LDRs. I found this in the Communication Source database by searching the phrase “long distance relationships and communication”. This article talks about a study done with people in long distance romantic relationships and how their face to face interactions and their technologically mediated communication was utilized. Bua327 (talk) 19:38, 8 October 2020 (UTC)