User talk:Chelsea.nakayama

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Hello, Chelsea.nakayama, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Instructor Feedback for Draft
Good start here to adding a section about technology and how that plays a role in the relationship stage model. The first paragraph has appropriate content, but it seems redundant from what is on the existing article []. Think about providing a transition paragraph from the existing content to the new content that you are adding. The second paragraph has some good insights about the role of social media. I think there could be more depth from the Fox and Werber (2013) article here. Also, do other social media allow for this information gathering process or just facebook? The third paragraph could be more distinct in the content as some it seems similar to the second paragraph. Also, I think readers might be confused by the "theme" term. Is that from the Mansson and Myers (2011) source? Could be more depth in this third paragraph as well. The information about number of facebook users is outdated at this point and would be better at the beginning of the section. If you would like to talk about gender differences, that is fine, but there will need to be more explanation and support from sources. You used 3 sources in the text, but have more in the "Bibliography." Make sure to use all the sources in your references section. Also, double-check for proper APA style. Jrpederson (talk) 14:06, 13 October 2020 (UTC)