User talk:Chelseaaaaa 2024/C's LGBTQ+ adoption, LGBTQ+ autoethnography, and LGBTQ+ Performance Studies

Peer Review
She started her sandbox with an overview of LGBTQ+ adoption and communication that introduced the topic to the readers well. I would also add that the article includes struggles of same sex adoptive parents. This article is very neutral but has one area that could be more neutral-- when discussing puberty in adoptive children use more neutral language like "They may hit puberty early if they have experienced traumatic events" rather than assuming all adoptive children have experienced this. The citations and links work but lead the reader to a page that requires payment to access, this may be due to using the txst link rather than the doi. Each fact or assertion is well represented by a reliable comm source other than what I listed above about puberty and adoptive children. I would adjust the lead sentence to refer back to the overall topic of family communication but other than that the lead sentence well represents the article. The only two words to watch I found in this article were "Important" and "Misconceptions" these words indicate bias. I believe that she wrote in wiki style and cited appropriately for the amount of content. I think it is important for your article to define concepts such as "heteronormativity", but overall this article avoided using their opinions and avoided jargon. Each source was used an appropriate amount and did not focus too much on one article or overlook another article. I suggest avoiding saying "one thing found in this article" and instead focusing on concepts of family communication and using your sources as support rather than describing what happened in each article. Each source is cited using the " button and there is a citation every two sentences. There is also a correctly used reference header at the top of the references. LE2003 (talk) 18:25, 15 April 2024 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the feedback L! I will be making that article more neutral standing. Will be looking at my sources in my references to make sure they have the DOI numbers. I will readjust my topic sentence to refer back to the overall topic. I will also explain the jargon as you have mention also look to see if I have anymore of jargon in my paragraph. Also, rewording my words to more of a wiki style. (Chelseaaaaa 2024 (talk) 17:53, 16 April 2024 (UTC)

Dr. E Review
C, you have really great content and sources here, and it needs to be written in Wiki style, so not “this article” does but focused on writing like an encyclopedia. See the Women’s Studies sample for help. You also need to explain jargon. See Canvas for more info. OsaRosa (talk) 08:57, 16 April 2024 (UTC)


 * Thank you Dr.E for my feedback! I will rewrite to look more like the wiki style. Also will copy and paste my paragraphs into a word doc to correct my spelling errors. Also, I will look into source three to either reword what the article found or pick a new source to replace it. (Chelseaaaaa 2024 (talk) 18:05, 16 April 2024 (UTC)

LGBTQ+ adoption and communication
Hi @Chelseaaaaa 2024, Rather than focusing on what the author said or "this article", try to change the writing style to a more encyclopedic, informative tone that reflects the main ideas that are being discussed. What are the main takeways/ideas that need to be shared with readers on Wikipedia? And how can you connect the content to the main article topic of, LGBTQ+ Communication studies? How can you tie back?

Also I suggest checking out pg. 8 of this PDF, for examples of encyclopedic writing. I think it might be helpful to look at and apply the style to your draft content. Brianda (Wiki Ed) (talk) 23:30, 19 April 2024 (UTC)