User talk:Chenny1/draft

Hello. I really liked your section on immortality for Sun Wukong! Your source seems to be perfect and I feel that this could be good insight for the Sun Wukong page. However, there are a couple of things that I want to mention to make this perfect. - I was confused at first about how and why Sun Wukong has several stories of turning immortal. I would put a short description in the beginning after the header explaining where this part of the storyline is just to give the reader a reminder for people like me that barely remember/ don't know the storyline! - It also would be good to mention a little more of about the stories especially the last two instead of just explaining how he got it and that it makes them immortal, I think you can add more detail from your text! - There were minor grammar adjustments like capitalizing King in book of mortals.

All in all, good job! Tnrud23 (talk) 09:03, 15 April 2019 (UTC)


 * Tnrud23 thanks for your helpful review, this is good advice for the author to follow! Chenny1 in addition to the suggestion by your peer reviewer (which you should certainly incorporate), I think your next step is to go beyond just re-telling the myth in the Wikipedia page, but including information about how/why these stories of immortality are important to the myth and its later reception. I think you did a great job finding an area that needed improvement on Sun Wukong's page, and taking information directly from the original text was very smart, since I didn't see it included already on the main page. Keep working hard on this and formatting your text (hyperlinks, etc.) and adding more sources. Great work so far! Gardneca (talk) 23:40, 21 April 2019 (UTC)