User talk:CherryBerry1727/sandbox

I think the definition of rape culture offered in the first line could be more concise. Here's one that I like from Marshall University's Women's Center: "Rape Culture is an environment in which rape is prevalent and in which sexual violence against women is normalized and excused in the media and popular culture." http://www.marshall.edu/wpmu/wcenter/sexual-assault/rape-culture/ Raskolnikov2 (talk) 03:21, 23 May 2013 (UTC)

The sentence "Rape culture has been used to model behavior within social groups" would benefit from clarification. Maybe something along the lines of "Rape culture encourages sexual violence in..." I think the problem is with the words "has been used to," this makes it sound like rape culture is a conscious being rather than a phenomenon stemming from widespread sexism. Raskolnikov2 (talk) 03:36, 23 May 2013 (UTC)

The opening sentence of paragraph three says "citation needed." One potential source for this is the film "The Bro Code." Raskolnikov2 (talk) 03:36, 23 May 2013 (UTC)

I think, given the recent media coverage of rape in the US military, that the article could benefit from a mention of rape culture within the US military. Raskolnikov2 (talk) 03:36, 23 May 2013 (UTC)

You probably are going to do this already, but I think if you start to put your article in to categories it will help you lay it out and help with the editing process. Bfromong —Preceding undated comment added 06:12, 23 May 2013 (UTC)

Also, in the second paragraph when it says "The term 'rape culture' originated in the 1970s during the second wave feminist movement and is often used by feminists to describe contemporary American culture as a whole." I think this could be useful in the beginning of the article, I think it gives a good history opener of the idea of rape culture and who sort of created this idea. Bfromong —Preceding undated comment added 06:19, 23 May 2013 (UTC)

(I will add the same comments to WStott's talk page.)

It looks like you've got a good list of ideas to expand on the rape culture article, as well as good resources. Do you have plans to address the reasons it is flagged for needing attention? Wikipedia editors are especially concerned about the following issues:


 * The neutrality of this article is disputed. (January 2013)
 * This article or section may contain previously unpublished synthesis of published material that conveys ideas not attributable to the original sources. (January 2013)

I suggest that you review the article's talk [|Talk page] before making any changes, since it has all taken place since January, 2013. If your contributions are outside the bounds of this discussion, they are likely to be promptly deleted.

E. Kissling (talk) 23:33, 2 June 2013 (UTC)

Hey this is Will from class. Wstotts (talk) 20:37, 4 June 2013 (UTC)Wstotts