User talk:Chloeluh/New sandbox

Kristie's Peer Review
I think it's really interesting to hear about the foreign influence on Botswana's tourism industry and the information/background you provide on it is great. It's unclear why imposing sanctions would have improved prospects for tourism. For the environmental impacts, you could frame it more in terms of actual outcomes versus what happens to the environment in theory. Was the communal land management program, in conjunction with foreign support, successful? There are no current section headers but the article is well structured, with background and current notable trends in tourism. Kristiephsham (talk) 17:20, 5 April 2019 (UTC)

Kelvin's Peer Review
I think you’ve made some great additions to the original article as it’s pretty bare bones at the moment. It’s useful providing context for the tourism industry historically as well as its environmental impacts. The article currently functions much more as a list, and so this really helps users that are hoping to learn more, especially systemically, about the tourism industry in Botswana.

However, I do think the structure could be improved slightly since there aren’t very clear divisions between topics. It would be really helpful to put in subheadings, and I think that it would be possible to even divide your edits into several different topic areas such as history, environmental impacts, and general information on each of the areas. That would be the most important thing you can do to improve the article, as it would expand the depth of information in each category. Otherwise, great work so far! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Helo008 (talk • contribs) 16:36, 7 April 2019 (UTC)