User talk:Choi.kel/sandbox

What does the article (or section) do well? (Here, consider the contribution’s tone—is it neutral? Is it well sourced? Does it offer useful reference information?) - Tone checked, valid article check (enjoyed how you did your checks on the article- i had not thought about that)

What changes would you suggest overall? (Be as specific as possible in your suggestions.) '''- I like how you are specific in what you are trying to add- possibly try more research papers? Because you added a brief-er section, maybe throw in an image if you can? Possibly from the research article itself'''

What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution '''- Again, the more research the merrier. <-- I would still try to add one more example, or at least list a few more topics of research? Maybe link in a couple more papers just as sources and talk about what other research is being done!'''

- BRIANNA CHEW

PEER REVIEW

What does the article (or section) do well? You've done a really good job of keeping this neutral and making sure it fits in with the tone of the original article. I like that besides your main paragraph additions you've also added some supporting sentences in order to fully incorporate your work.

What changes would you suggest overall? I changed one tense issue that I noticed (so you wouldn't have to search for it), but double check to make sure there aren't any others. In the first section you discuss rs25531 and rs25532, but then the rest of the section only describes the significance of rs25531. What happens with the other one? Not sure if relevant just something I noticed. Other than that I honestly think this looks ready to go! I think you have a great foundation if you wanted to add any other research/facts you have on the insomnia section. Stmarom (talk) 04:50, 5 August 2017 (UTC)