User talk:Chris jumbo/sandbox

Hi Chris, Your article is off to a good start. However, the articles switches between the present tense and the past tense in a few areas and those will need to be changed to the past tense. This will make it both easier to read as well as make more logical sense. In one part of the article, it references that the terms of Treaty 2 were similar to that of Treaty 1. In order to add more information to this article, I think you should still include what those terms are. This will improve the article so that readers do not then need to go look up the terms of Treaty 1. I would also make "Treat 1" in that sentence a direct link to Treaty 1's Wiki page. Same thing for the section on the revisions, I would try and find exactly what was said verbally and therefore added to the Treaty.