User talk:Christine.quach/sandbox

Peer Review

The sources in the article are scholarly and credible and the sources are well distributed in the article. The grammar and mechanics are good for the most part. "Due to" is repeated frequently throughout the sections. Maybe you could try to switch up sentence structure. This may also help the flow. Some areas seem a bit choppy, try adding transition words. I know that you are adding on to an article, so this is not the end result. That leads me to my next point. Some areas of the article are vague but then again you are adding on to an existing work which might have other information. I like the pictures that you have included. In addition I think the "History" section has lots of potential. I think it was beneficence that you wrote about the first work published about the fruit. If you could elaborate on its usage throughout history and other books and texts that mention the fruit that could add a lot. One part that I thought could use clarification was the part about chemicals in the first section. It might be helpful to add more specifics here to make it less vague. It will also make the paragraph sound more encyclopedic. Overall great start and great ideas, I am sure it will fit in nicely to the article.

Tug46396 (talk) 03:12, 2 November 2016 (UTC)Ritu Vyas