User talk:Cindyand/sandbox

Peer Review Comments:

Remember to take out the brainstorming notes, annotated bib, planning out, and anything that isn't the published article.

The chart to explain the episodes is a great visual layout rather than pouring out sentences into a paragraph about each episode. Maybe add more info about each episode though. Explain the slave history, the government's position, how it currently and historically affected the people in the country, etc.

It's interesting to see why some countries do not have as much information, media control and censorship play a big part in what is released to the public.

Peer Review Comments - Nick
Overall I think you guys have done a great job of writing a balanced and detailed article, and I only have a few minor comments. First, at the end of the first paragraph where you outline the broad premise of the show you mention specific policies employed by countries to lighten their populations, yet no such policies are mentioned in the episode descriptions. I think it would be useful to add a bit about these policies to the episode descriptions, or, otherwise remove that bit from the introduction so that it accurately reflects the content of the episodes as described below. Lastly, a few points about the final paragraph regarding criticism. First, who are the two people criticizing the show, and what makes them authoritative voices on the subject. Also, since you mention that Gate's book provides additional information that refutes the criticism against his documentary, you should try and include that specific information as well if its available. Finally, were there any positive reviews or praise for the show? Including that might help balance out the final section and provide a more complete overview of the documentary's reception. Overall though, great work and it seems like a really interesting documentary series! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Natinoco (talk • contribs) 05:35, 26 March 2018 (UTC)