User talk:Cjames2020/sandbox

Ore's Review Hi Cyana. Right off the bat, I want to suggest that you copy and paste the entire wiki page that you are editing into your sandbox and then input your additions either in bold or italics. That way it would be easier to follow rather than switching between the original article and your proposed edits. Also, your sources are not properly linked in Wikipedia standard in your sandbox so I can't look at them to determine whether your sources are reliable. Overall, the content you added is relevant to the topic and goes into more detail. None of your additions seem like they would be out of place in the article and addresses an underrepresented topic. It also has a neutral tone and does not seem like you are being subjective in any way. I also think your content would improve the overall quality of the article since they go into more detail about sections that people would find relevant, but again, the absence of references does not really let us know if anything you plan to add is reliable. Hope this helps. -Oreoluwa Ogunnaike --Oogunnaike (talk) 19:49, 24 November 2020 (UTC)

Hi Ore! I incorporated your feedback and added the original article so it should be easier to follow along now. I had an issue adding my sources, so I have an in depth list if you would like to see the references. Cjames2020 (talk) 01:41, 9 December 2020 (UTC) Hi Cyana,

For positive feedback, the additions that you want to add under the Evidence section look great. I thought you did a really good job explaining and going into depth about the history of the Bem study. For constructive feedback, I would be interested to see if there was anymore details about Bem's education and history that you would think is interesting enough to include. I was also wondering if there were any other prominent researchers or research studies that you thought should be added just to go into more depth about gender schema theory. But if Bem is the strongest contributer to the field I think it looks really well done.

-David de la Fuente — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dcdelafuente7 (talk • contribs) 04:09, 23 November 2020 (UTC)

Hi David! I added a sentence about Bem, but I did not add too much because I noticed that the original author already included a link to a separate wiki page dedicated to Bem. I also briefly mentioned another study like you suggested. Cjames2020 (talk) 01:41, 9 December 2020 (UTC)