User talk:Cjervoo/draftarticle

Hallo Cjervoo, Your revisions and extensions to the original article are badly needed and thorough! Here are some suggestions to consider before you press the publication button (as I hope you will!). Lead Section: strong first sentence. The paragraph does a good job of locating deviance as a distinct area of Sociology and how other disciplines call on it(criminology, gender). However I wonder if the sentence "Deviance may hold negative ..." and " As a society's understanding ..." plus "the violation of norms ... to end of paragraph would be best out of Lead Section and included in "Sociological Perspectives" (take out Three). Start with basic definitions from early in Lead Section then go into how the three different theoretical perspectives offer different contributions to the Sociology of Deviance. In the Lead Sentence, replace the definitional sentences with a summary of the article: sociological concept; different theoretical perspectives and case studies. Three Sociological Perspectives: need to link this sentence to the sociology of deviance as such to keep this sentence relevant to the topic. Perhaps you need to say simply that out of the three main perpsectives it is functionalism that has shaped the sociology of deviance the most or something similar? Functionalism paragraph: last sentence needs linking to the main topic of the article: The two key theorists who have contributed to functionalism and the sociology of deviance are ....". But you also might want to include Erikson and Cohen??? Durkheim: need citations for first typology. Sutherland's differential association ... Need to contextualise Becker in relation to Sutherland. At the moment it jumps to Becker. Or give Becker his own sub-heading. I look forward to seeing this published in the original article! JaneHaggis 06:38, 21 October 2019 (UTC)