User talk:Cjumeh11/sandbox

draft comments
Hey, I'm providing online support for your class at UMD and I had a few comments on your draft: I'm looking forward to seeing more on this topic. Thanks for your work so far. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:48, 3 November 2014 (UTC)
 * There appear to be some scholarly sources engaging Okoye's work (e.g. a chapter in this book) which could really improve the article. I haven't done an exhaustive search but there look to be 3-5 articles you could probably get ahold of from your library pretty easily.
 * Take a look at Janise Yntema for a sense of what an article like this might look like, specifically:
 * Wikipedia articles start with a "lead" section which doesn't need a heading. This section is a short summary of everything in the article. For some articles this summary can be a few paragraphs. Others (like Yntema's article and probably this one) can be a few sentences long.
 * Sections like "accomplishments" are usually best integrated into prose rather than left as bulleted lists. In some cases (e.g. where there are many awards) a list is fine, but in this case we've got an award for a book and an award for her, so turning that into a paragraph won't be too hard and will likely make the article read a bit better.
 * Do we know when she was born or other biographical details?
 * It helps to link certain topics or things in wikipedia articles, for example Anambra State can be wikilinked, allowing the reader to follow that link for some added context.


 * For other sources, you may want to check out this biography. Additionally, there is commentary about her work in this book and thhis chapter, and WorldCat has a list of additional works.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 16:33, 7 November 2014 (UTC)