User talk:Ckgreen/sandbox

Hi Ckgreen, here are some comments to help you refine the draft article for publication. Lead Section: Needs a tighter and more direct link to the topic in the first sentence. What do gender binaries have to do with social constructionism of gender? I'd startg with social constructionism then clarify the link with gender binaries. give egs of some of the classical and contemporary theorists you refer to here (and links to any wikipedia pages they may have). Suggest you add a final brief sentence pointing out how this differs from social construction. Overall, make it more clear that the theory of the social construction of gender is refuting gender binary as biology. One Sex Model - make clear this is an argument made by Laquer that is influential in social construction approach but not all sociological approaches to gender (link to relevant sociology page if there is one). (to be cont) JaneHaggis 03:40, 21 October 2019 (UTC) Structure, Agency & Gender: the first sentence doesn't link to the topic of this section, it kind of repeats what you said in the previous section. Suggest you start with second sentence. Performances:Usually one works from the earliest work on a concept to the most recent. I would suggest reversing the order here, and making Frued, then Goffman and West and Zimmerman then Butler. Insert link to Judith Butler's wikipedia page; ideology is not really the optimal word. I would replace this with theory. Link to Goffman's wikipedia page. Link to heteronormativity page(there is one). Link to dramaturgy (sociology)wikipedia page (there is one). McLeod should be a citation. There is a wikipage for Sigmund Frued and also one for polymorphous perversity and psychonalysis (psychonanalytic). There is also a wikipedia page for gender scripts. Overall make some useful additions to the original page. Although I am not clear on whether you mean these additions to be added to the existing page or to replace existing sections that may not seem so central to the topic. I hope you consider publishing and would urge you to contact 1990Ben (another student in our class) who has done a revision of the same page. Between the two of you, you could really enrich this page on social construction of gender. JaneHaggis 04:27, 21 October 2019 (UTC)