User talk:Claire203/sandbox

Hi Claire! It looks really good so far. The first question on my mind, however, is what does "early medieval" mean? By that, I mean maybe be more specific with the time period by using a number. Also, gold was used but is there information about other materials that were used? What sort of animal hide, the composition of the inks. Overall, though, a really great start! (Angela Ott)Ottangel (talk) 08:03, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

Claire, You've made an impressive amount of progress already, well done! Here are a few considerations as you put the finishing touches on your project: Please touch base with any questions.
 * Your overall organization and subheads work well so no changes needed in that respect
 * proofread for spelling (extravegant) and mechanical errors
 * include where the covers are now (your draft indicates she initially dedicated the mss there, but leaves out that they're still there)
 * include one or more images of your book covers (higher priority than later image of queen herself)
 * Why does the Legacy section start with "though..."? You make important points in this part, but the prose could be tightened a little here and throughout (a normal part of revision for all of us, sigh)
 * Ideally you'd expand your research beyond just the two sources, but at least they both look like credible sources by experts.

AMcClanan (talk) 21:54, 26 November 2018 (UTC)

Alex Fager Feedback
Hi Claire,

It looks like you have a good framework to build off of, and your headings and organization appear to be in good order. It looks like you still have a bit to do, so I'll focus my suggestions on how to help flesh out the article.

Decoration -Here, I would really dig into the descriptives. For instance, describe the four cameos in detail. What is physically depicted? A Lion, Ox or Eagle? Once this has been established, then try to make the connection to the gospel evangelists.

Legacy -The book covers certainly sound important, but if you include why scholars consider it an important example of Lombard art it would be a more convincing statement.

Good luck on the final draft! Axfager (talk) 04:53, 29 November 2018 (UTC)

Response, Nathan Cekoric
You're doing great with the formatting! I'm not sure how descriptive your sources are, but since you don't have a picture of the book covers, I'd like to see you describe the covers in detail under "Decoration" if possible.

NCekoric (talk) 06:18, 29 November 2018 (UTC)

Feedback from Prof McClanan
Your entry offers important info but issues remain- it's an orphan entry and some of the draft's issues persist. Hopefully you can continue to fine-tune moving forward!AMcClanan (talk) 16:52, 10 December 2018 (UTC)