User talk:ClaudiaBecker/sandbox

Great job so far! I think you've added great historical content to the page. The photos you've added are a very nice addition as well. To start, it is unclear whether you intend to have a new lead sentence (Hysteria was removed from the DSM in 1980) or plan keep the original (Hysteria colloquially means ungovernable emotional excess). I think starting with the DSM is not as effective because a general audience will not necessarily know what the DSM does, why it is significant, or even what the acronym means. Therefore, I would suggesting keeping some version of the original lead sentence. I also wonder if the sections mentioning Jean-Martin Charcot and Sigmund Freud might be better discussed under 1 over-arching heading (notable figures?) and their names as 2 sub-headings? If you think it is better as 2 headings, I think you'll need more effective titles than "Hysteria and..." since the whole article is referring to hysteria. This is also a great opportunity to link to already existing articles to increase visibility (e.g., Charcot and Freud have wiki pages that can be linked). It might also be useful to link to Mass Hysteria (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mass_psychogenic_illness) in some form or fashion. Overall, nice work! Phia Salter (talk) 03:09, 22 April 2020 (UTC)