User talk:Cliff310

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 * Hello Cliff.Daamoy (talk) 03:25, 11 January 2015 (UTC)

CHM437 Peer Editing
Hello, I'm not sure if you're finished with your page, but I'll just put a few suggestions here. I like the side bar information and pictures and the further reading section, but there can definitely be more expansion in terms of the actual content. You could add in more information about the structure and activity of your molecule itself under separate headings and include information on the mechanism (if it's known). The overall layout from the original article looks pretty solid so I would follow that closely as you add in things. Good luck with the assignment!

BChung2 (talk) 17:42, 1 March 2015 (UTC)

CHM347
Hey Cliff, the article layout looks awesome. Here are some suggestions to make the article better: 1. maybe include the image of the active site of the protein 2. show some reaction mechanism 3. maybe include some history of the discovery of the protein. Take care and maybe it would be cool if you could comment on my sandbox article. Rahman437 (talk) 21:00, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

CHM437 Peer Editing II
Hey Cliff310, great page. I like a bunch of things about it.

positives

 * Good use of bolding, italics, and other formatting
 * Good table of contents organization
 * Good referencing, and further reading sections
 * Excellent linking to other parts of Wikipedia

things to improve

 * You are pretty close to touching upon this: This is a stylistic thing, but for me it would have been useful to know what Wilson's decease is very briefly. For example, you could have said "... causes Wilson's Disease, a decease in which copper accumulates in tissues leading to neurological and psychiatric issues"
 * The interactions section is a good start. To expand upon it:
 * balanced chemical equations may or may not be useful in highlighting certain parts of these interactions
 * Totally could be a waste of time, but it may be interesting to show a reaction schematic if appropriate. At the same time, it might be too much work.
 * The structure section is good. To add, possibly talk about the: metal-center, primary, secondary, tertiary, quaternary components etc.
 * The article is called "Wilson disease protein", however the first paragraph introduces it as "Wilson disease-associatied protein". I would instead say something like "Wilson disease-associated protein (Wilson disease protein) also known as..."

Overall a great start and very well formatted

Thanks a lot Lozmeister (talk) 22:09, 2 March 2015 (UTC) Updated Lozmeister (talk) 23:10, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Peer comments from Daamoy
Hi Cliff, overall it is a good start. I have a few suggestions:

1. In the lead section, "Genetic disorder of ATP7B gene may lead to the absence of function for ATP7B protein.." --this sounds very obvious. You could just say "Genetic disroder of ATP7B gene may lead to Winson disease." or change the wording a little bit.

2. Gene name "ATP7B" should always be italicized. (In contrast, protein name is not italicized)

3. In the Gene section, "Wilson disease is caused by various mutations in the mRNA. One of the common mutations is single base pair mutation,H1069Q."--So the DNA is not mutated, but the mRNA is?

4."Wilson disease happens when accumulation of copper inside liver which causes mitochondria damage and cell destruction."---delete "which". Make sure to double check your grammar.

5. "Therefore,the presentation of Wilson disease could be various excluding hepatic disease"---I'm not quite sure what this means.

Thank you!

Daamoy (talk) 20:28, 3 March 2015 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Daamoy (talk • contribs) 03:28, 3 March 2015 (UTC)