User talk:Clifford mcgraw/sandbox

Brittny's Peer Review
Hi Clifford, I reviewed your article "Diversity in computing." As an African-American female, I am very interested in learning about the representation (or lack thereof) of women and minorities in the field. You listed statistics that were cited, and I appreciate the links you provided to related topics. Your sources are reputable, neutral, and current, and the links I checked work. Although you wrote the introduction so far, I would have liked for you to touch on some general reasons as to why certain populations are underrepresented in computer science fields; I believe you will elaborate later in the article? You demonstrated great spelling and grammar, but I noticed a missing comma after 'and' in the first sentence. This article has potential; great work!Brittny Eaddy (talk) 22:41, 13 October 2019 (UTC)