User talk:Cmuebel/sandbox

Emma's peer edit notes
This is good so far! I like that the article focuses on health-- do you think the title could be more specifically health-oriented? If you're just planning to write a general article on indoor mold, some more information about history, cause, types, spread, appearance, etc. should be added.

The first and last paragraph of the "Health effects" section are very similar (both list symptoms), and if the last paragraph is part of the asthma category it could be more specific to asthma. The article could also have an introductory section, which the first paragraph of "Health effects" would work well in.

These sections could also use more citations (i.e., to EPA's recommendations, to articles about bulk sampling, etc).

Overall, it looks like you've made a lot of improvements to the original article.

Zana left a peer review
I added my peer review comments to the bottom of your sandbox!

--Zana.percy (talk) 13:57, 15 October 2018 (UTC)