User talk:Cognitura/Gender inequality in Japan/FrozenFrosch Peer Review

Peer Review
''"Overall, I think the article looks pretty solid thus far. I think you've done a great job of illustrating the changes you would like to make and giving options for which way you think you should edit them.

''One thing that I think might be worth noting (and I'm unsure if this was your framing or the initial framing of the existing article), is that I think the Lead paragraph has a little bit of a Western bias; using framing like "even as a developed and modern society" right off the bat. While I don't know that it's meant to mean anything in this context, terms like "modern" or "developed" can oftentimes be used as more acceptable stand-ins for implying whether or not a people is "civilized" and has accepted the norms of the West. I don't think that this article is really trying to push that in any way. I don't know that the initial part of the lead-in is fully appropriate. Maybe something like "even in the modern era" would be better, cause it emphasizes the focus on the current time more so than western ideas of development.''

I think all of the additions to family values, politics and education all look solid & there are a ton of references which is great!"''

Thank you for your feedback! My other review also mentioned work in the lead, and both of you make good points. I agree the page doesn't push that view but the wording in the lead could be reworked to better reflect the tone of the rest of the article, especially because topics like these can easily turn biased. Cognitura (talk) 04:27, 24 February 2024 (UTC)