User talk:Cold water kid

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Hello, Cold water kid, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Feedback
Nice work on your draft article - it's a really impressive start. One thing to bear in mind - a Wikipedia article begins with a lead rather than an introductory paragraph; your first sentence or two should say (as concisely as possible) what the article is about. Many readers are interested in figuring out what a topic is as quickly as possible - ideally you should let them know what this is in a sentence or two. This is the reason why Wikipedia articles begin with "[Subject] is..." Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 23:33, 24 February 2016 (UTC)