User talk:Colder68/sandbox

Hey Colder68,

For your distribution section you could add in what oceans they do not exist in. For the description part I feel like there is a better way to express/talk about the radial canals because reading it I was kinda confused on it. Maybe like about there habitat, what they eat, and how big they can get. Other wise nice start.

Amandaburl28 (talk) 20:26, 21 March 2016 (UTC)

Instead of the second sentence in the Description section having so many commas maybe you should put a period after "tentacles" and start a new sentence with "there". (Aeivkovich (talk) 20:47, 21 March 2016 (UTC))

Even the links of the families are listed, in the first section maybe you could include describing something in all of the families instead of just saying that the Rhopalonematidae has the greatest diversity. (Aeivkovich (talk) 20:47, 21 March 2016 (UTC))

Maybe for the Interactions with Humans section you could add more of how they are specifically affecting the zoo-plankton and how this fits in with an interaction with humans. (Aeivkovich (talk) 20:47, 21 March 2016 (UTC))

I agree with that in the Distribution section you try to add more information, and adding more description to the types of oceans they are found in like if they are tropical or if they are found in the colder oceans. (Aeivkovich (talk) 20:47, 21 March 2016 (UTC))

I suggest that you might want to rephrase some of your sentences and add more information. Some things were not clear and a little difficult to understand. I would look for maybe an image for the description section to better visualize some of the structures. Zoezentner (talk) 18:00, 22 March 2016 (UTC)