User talk:Compost Camel/Redox gradient

Peer Review for Redox Gradient:

Lead Section Overall a good section! I'm a little confused about the usage of the word "depth" in the second sentence (and throughout the article later). You mention that redox gradients can form laterally as well as vertically, so it feels a bit too specific. Maybe try saying that reducing conditions are in one area and oxidizing conditions are in another, so a gradient naturally forms in between them. The section could also probably mention briefly that microbes live along these gradients and use them in different ways as well how they are measured with volts to include all sections of the article in the lead. Regarding specific phrasing, it was good except for "is a concept that explains how redox reactions sort themselves" which seems very wordy. Maybe try "A redox gradient is a series of reduction-oxidation reactions that organize spatially or temporally based on the chemical species present," or something like that. Just be a bit more direct with your phrasing for the lead sentence, since it's probably the most important sentence in the article. You may also want to explain what redox is by putting it in parenthesis next to reduction-oxidation, so the terms are all clear.

Structure Your structure was fantastic! Your section divisions were logical and I appreciate that Aquatic and Terrestrial Environments were joined under Environmental Conditions. It's also good that you including the section regarding measuring the redox gradient before you discussed the actual data. The only issue I have with structure is that first section (Reactions along a redox gradient); the title seems a bit wordy and not perfectly reflective of the content. Your first paragraph discusses how to measure redox reactions and the second bit gives many examples. I would try to combine the examples and links to other articles with the pictures later on in the article while changing the section title to "Measuring Redox Reactions" or something like that.

Balance of Coverage Everything was covered pretty well. I think terrestrial environments has more information (data specifically) than aquatic environments, so you may want to try to add some data for the aquatic ones, if it's available. I also think that the role of microorganisms section could be much longer - there's a lot of information about microorganisms living in redox gradients out there, but that may not be within the scope of this project. Still, it could probably be expanded a little bit.

Neutral Content Your tone was neutral the whole time; I didn't detect any bias. The only phrase that may be problematic is "generally accepted" in the terrestrial environments subsection, but it seems like a good way to say that most scientists think this is true for most cases, but there are always edge cases. Therefore, I think you did a good job of wording it.

Reliable Sources Your sources look great! They're all either journal articles or textbooks, so they appear trustworthy. You also have multiple references for most sections and many sentences, which is important. It feels like you're synthesizing the information from all the different articles very well. You use reference 1 throughout the article, which probably means it's a very comprehensive source, but try not to reference it by itself too much because you're using it a lot. In addition, I think you should try to extract more information out of source 9 for the aquatic section and maybe relate it to a few of the other sources (like reference 1 again). One thing to consider: make sure you don't need to cite anything in your figure captions!

Great job overall! The information in your article is pretty clear, with the exception of the word "depth" being used a bit too much. Try to add in a few more links to other articles; any phrase that isn't defined should have a link to it (like standard hydrogen electrode for instance, even if that just links to electrodes). I look forward to reading the finished product!

- Cleca9159 (talk) 19:33, 4 November 2021 (UTC)