User talk:Cooltopics/sandbox

Feedback: Sentence 6 needs to be reworded/formatted

Too many long and wordy sentnces

Jumps around a lot; could probably be made into more precise and one topic paragraphs

The lead is well stated to show what the rest of the article is about

Need to state the things referring to women's rights from a neutral stand point

The references given seem to reliable and the information from them is presented more, but maybe try to get another source that is more neutral or for the other standpoint

Overall information covers topic well, just needs more structure and a clear and neutral standpoint

Hannahmariemar (talk) 17:17, 17 March 2016 (UTC)