User talk:Corymatlock/sandbox


 * Hi Cory, after reading your sandbox on 301,302 I thought it was very well constructed. The plot was very concise and intriguing. On your second paragraph though when you write, "Yoon-hee experiences flashbacks of sexual assault and watches the bookshelves in her apartment fall over", maybe you can remove the part about the bookshelves? It just sounded a little weird. But other than that I thought your rough draft is really good. I was also wondering where your source citations where? Will you add that in once you will officially publish the article?

Cinemastudent (talk) 23:59, 25 November 2018 (UTC)

Thank you for the comments! I took out the part of the plot section with the bookshelves. I also added in the sources here but I inserted them differently in the actual article. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Corymatlock (talk • contribs) 01:34, 7 December 2018 (UTC)