User talk:Courtney.Ingham/Polychaete Aedicira

Hey Courtney!

I like the basic structure of your article and I think you've found some strong sources and good beginning info! I like the way you moved from a general overview (lead) into the more specific sections of location, feeding, reproduction, etc. Good job!

I have a few concerns/edits for you to look at for your draft:

1. Typos : - Anamalia -> Animalia - 1st paragraph their -> they're

2. Don't put N/A for the order. If you don't know it/can't find it, I wouldn't include it.

3. In the 1st paragraph, you need to specify what kind of grouping is being talked about (family, order, etc.) for Bilateria and Annelida, even if it is stated above. It gets confusing and I'm sitting there like what size of a group/classification are we looking at here? It will make it easier to follow.

4. They aren't "an" Annelida -> they are "in the Phylum Annelida"

5. Eating habits - I would use sediment or detritus instead of mud and maybe use ingest or feed on instead of eat because I don't know if that is always entirely correct otherwise

6. Location - some sentences are choppy and I think you could make this connect better or supplement the existing material

7. Reproduction - most polychaetas -> most organisms "in the class Polychaeta"

8. Citations: I would go back and rewatch the wiki tutorials on citations. There are ways to make a reference section and easily cite in-text as you go. I totally understand if you just haven't gotten around to that yet :)

9. Title: I would maybe change your article title because people might not know why you call the species Aedicira and then Aricidea. If you don't wanna change it, you might want to explain the various ways the species is referred to early on in the article. I got confused.

Kdirr2023 (talk) 19:28, 15 March 2022 (UTC)


 * I agree with the transition from general to specific. I think it does a good job shaping the article. Starting with a solid description of the classification and synapomorphies would be a great way to introduce the topic to new readers. The location piece was another important section. There was a lot of relevant information there. If the information is available, I think you could add some cool stuff to the sections you already have. For example, are they a prey item for any other species? Do we know anything about their more complex behaviors? Do they have a larger role in the ecosystem? If you can find it, I think it would make the article even stronger. Again, I agree, be careful with some of the technical terms. It can get tricky diving into different taxonomic classifications. Other than that, solid start so far. Derekwestman (talk) 15:04, 17 March 2022 (UTC)