User talk:Cpichany/sandbox

Jie(Jay) Yin (talk) 01:09, 3 December 2020 (UTC) Jay Yin: First, the lead section, you have the clear one and bring readers directly to the main point. Second, the structure, you provide the examples of poverty and inequality, basically strong enough to convince readers. Third, the coverage, from your article, we can see aa lot, but you expand your view, that's a great point. However, about the content, in general it is nice, though there's a critical problem. In my page, I cannot see the what and which line corresponding to your reference, like the little number after the sentence. It's kind of hard to figure the where the reference was used to. Finally, the course, it is legally and useful, what you provide are available and done well.

Peer Review
Nicely written Cpichany! I like the new statistics and facts you added in and I feel like they do contribute to the article and it's main idea. However, I can not see where you found this information because it is not directly cited. Once you type a statistic or fact you need to cite which source it came from. I also think you could add one more sentence to really improve this article. But overall well done. Maddywhit24 (talk 03:24, 3 December 2020 (UTC)maddywhit24