User talk:CrazyGPLady/sandbox

Major revisions necessary. “More importantly, the film was based…” - This should be reworded as it sounds like a value judgement on your part. “Prince-Blythewodd’s personal life, growing up, her experiences, etc. (Cabrera, 2008).” - Are you quoting Cabrera here? “She brought herself into that film which is why some critiques say the film was so well done.” - This should be cited to the critic who stated this and rewritten to accommodate that citation. “Before I Fall by Lauren Oliver.” - Link to the page for the film and the author. “March 2017 after its release date at the very beginning of the month (IMDb, Before I Fall).” - State the actual release date for the film. As well, IMDB is a user generated resource and if you want to cite box office figures there are sites that will have those numbers in more official capacities. The article is in need of some major revision before you post it. Certain sentences are worded as if they are personal value judgements coming for you which should be changed. Citations to the articles you are mentioning should be done properly and with links. There is room for improving Blythewodd’s Wikipedia page but make sure that you are going to have enough material to meet the requirements of the assignment. I have pointed out some specific sentences and sections that need to be worked on above.

Batcow39 (talk) 16:42, 21 February 2018 (UTC)

Peer review
Kudos for taking on such an already well established wiki page, and there is some good information here that is quite different from the existing info on the current page for Prince-Bytherwood. Some things to consider: you have a lot of information on her awards from various films, why not consider expanding the awards section of her wiki article. Also, Wikipedia doesn't use embedded referencing, so make sure to use the cite function, to update your references sections. And while the information you have here is good, it seems to be from other wiki pages and other user-generated sites. Prince-Bytherwood's works that you reference are not all mentioned on her current page, is there any journal articles or newspaper clips that reference Prince-Bytherwood's work, or maybe where her relationship with Gugu Mbatha-Raw developed from

Violathompson (talk) 18:41, 24 February 2018 (UTC)

There is already much of the basic information already on this Wikipedia page. This makes your job much more challenging, as Viola already said. What I recommend doing before continuing to write is to go back to the source research portion and see if you can find those crucial early sources (it will help your page stay up and you get a good grade!). Once you have those really good early sources it will be much easier to add to this page, because it already includes most of the obvious and easy to find information about the filmmaker. I also agree with Viola that you should use the built-in citation system that will help the page seem more professional. You include the sentence that discusses how the film Love and Basketball is related to her life, but the follow-up on this statement is weaker than would be hoped. Try to fill in some of these holes! Remember that your sources are the most important part of the article!

JoshDoctsonJD (talk) 18:37, 26 February 2018 (UTC)

Re Edits to Gina Prince-Blythewood Article
I've moved this page back to your sandbox -- when you've finished merging the content, you can either just leave it, blank it, or request it be deleted by replacing its content with " " ~Hydronium~Hydroxide~(Talk)~ 09:36, 9 March 2018 (UTC)