User talk:Creamchzy

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Someone proposed the article Simplified swarm optimization for deletion. I don't think it needs to be deleted, but I'm of the opinion that the topic should be made a little bit clearer. If it's a simplification of Particle swarm optimization, then maybe the article on PSO should include a reference to the benefits of simplifying it. --Elkman (Elkspeak) 01:52, 20 July 2011 (UTC)

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You wrote an article that begins like this:
 * Simplified swarm optimization was originally designed by Yeh in 2009, and called the discrete PSO (DPSO) to initially overcome the drawback of particle swarm optimization in discrete problems.

That is an inappropriate way to start a Wikipedia article. The lay reader should not have to read all the way through the first sentence and still be guessing whether it's about theology, chemistry, finance, military tactics, chess tactics, biology of insects (after all, it says something about swarms....) etc. If computer science is what this is, then saying "In computer science, simplified swarm optimization was originally designed by" etc., would already be an immense improvement over what appears there now. Michael Hardy (talk) 02:06, 21 July 2011 (UTC)