User talk:Creativelyrics

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I wanted to add this to lyrics section for Nas article. it is my personal analysis of his work. No articles are sited. Am I allow to add this the Nas article?

''I am regular poster on allhiphop.com and hip hop game.com Someone sent me a link to this page.Most important was Nas's amazing breath control as he displayed the ability to "spit" 15 second bars without breathing multiple times per verse; a skill that takes years to develop. This critical skill allows Nas to vocally execute complex visual sentences that maintain a listener's attention for a longer period because most rappers would have to breath and pause in the middle of a long complex sentence while Nas finish the entire sentence without pausing to breath and allow his listener to concentrate on the entire sentence instead of pausing with Nas while he gasp for air in the middle of a long complex sentence. Nas superior breath control allows Nas to execute longer, complex sentences without pause for breath as opposed to being limited to less complex short sentences due to lack of breath control suffered by most of Nas predecessors. Nas's use of visual verbs in songs like NY State of Mind, paint moving pictures in his listener's mind, and finally his ability to pull plain ideas such as 'measuring cups' from his environment and reconstruct them to create a visual psychological portrait not created before in hip hop of life as a young underclass inner city 1990's African American male, makes “Illmatic” a living historical artifact on par with Ralph Ellison's Invisible Man. “Illmatic” shines brightly as a tutorial for future hip hop artists on how to creatively continue hip hop's vital role as the voice of the underclass underprivileged inner city young adult. Masterful use of transition words connecting each of his bars allows for listeners of all socioeconomic positions to follow his complex line of thought as he creatively immerses you with countless insights into the struggles of the continuing 90's inner-city underclass African Americans' plight to survive in America."''
 * What is your question? — Keakealani •Poke Me•contribs• 00:32, 16 August 2006 (UTC)


 * I really appreciate your work on the Illmatic article, but I had to tone down some of your most recent edits for two reasons: They were unsourced, and they were heavily POV. I agree with you that Illmatic is a lyrical masterpiece, but Wikipedia's policies (such as no original research and neutral point of view) require that articles stick to facts and opinions by reliable third parties. If you can source some of what you were saying, it can certainly go back in the article. Please let me know if you have any questions, and keep up the good work on the hip hop classics. If you wish, you can join the new Hip Hop wikiproject]--Chubdub 02:03, 16 August 2006 (UTC)


 * I suggest you make a description of Illmatic's lyricism instead of issuomg your own statement. But try to avoid using weasel words


 * Please review the following policies:
 * No original research
 * Cite your sources
 * The neutral point of view
 * What Wikipedia is not (particularly the section titled "Wikipedia is not a publisher of original thought")
 * thanks --Chubdub 02:10, 16 August 2006 (UTC)


 * And please sign your posts by typing ~ at the end of your comments. Chubdub 02:23, 16 August 2006 (UTC)
 * In addition, you might want to copy-edit that a little bit, if you decide to put anything into the article. That section is a rather large chunk of text full of run-ons and poor sentence structure; since this is an encyclopaedia, it's always a good idea to write in a very professional and, well, encyclopaedic manner, in order to improve Wikipedia's overall reliability.  However, NPOV and whatnot is always the first thing to take care of, so those policies are a good thing to review first. — Keakealani  •Poke Me•contribs• 09:42, 16 August 2006 (UTC)