User talk:Critonia/sandbox

Ali's peer review
The content of this article is very helpful to readers and provides a lot more detail than the original article. The information covers a wide variety of details and is really encompassing of many of the things that K-pop has achieved globally, both as a genre and as a cultural movement. Something that may make your article flow better would be to divide it into sub-sections or different paragraphs. Since you cover social media, concerts in in the U.S., and talk shows in the U.S., I think you'd have enough content to justify creating separate sections. Also, linking to other Wikipedia articles might help your readers gain knowledge about certain subjects that they may not known about. You're sources seem very reliable, and you have a good balance of source use throughout the article, which assures readers that a bias isn't being created or enforced. Awesome job!Agarbacz (talk) 00:25, 18 October 2018 (UTC)

Hkim856 (talk) 14:45, 19 October 2018 (UTC) Well done. In addition to Ali's suggestions, I also want to ask you how you want to place your draft within the "Korean idol" article. You might consider 1) making a new subsection or 2) tailoring your draft as a lead section (the very first part of the article).