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'''Original Version: The first attempt at articulating a specific notion of queer ecology was in the May 1994 issue of UnderCurrents: Journal of Critical Environmental Studies titled “queer nature.” The editorial essay points out the “disruptive power of any examination of the normative categories of nature and the natural from the perspective of queer identity” and that “a politics of nature can no longer be an articulation of white, male, heterosexual prescriptive or descriptive privilege.”[8] In 2015, UnderCurrents released an update to their original groundbreaking issue, titled “From Queer/Nature to Queer Ecologies: Celebrating 20 Years of Scholarship and Creativity.” They also produced a podcast on the “pasts, presents, and futures of queer ecological scholarship” in coordination with the release of the issue.[9]

'''Description of intended changes: I think that claiming the May 1994 issue of UnderCurrents was the first mention of queer ecology could be false, thus I will read it and check up on the facts. I’ll probably change it to saying that it was “one of the first mentions”. Additionally, I will better describe what the UnderCurrents issue included rather than having that long confusing quote that doesn’t really make sense. I will also look into the other UnderCurrents releases and verify that the information written about them is correct. I will also add more information about those releases since they are just named and not really described Structurally, I will remove some of the wordiness from this section because it just adds to confusion rather than clarifying what is going on with the groundbreaking articles that were released. I also think that paraphrasing is the route I’ll take rather than including direct quotes from the articles mentioned. Moreover, I will look into whether there were other original pieces on queer ecology that haven’t been addressed, and add them in. While I am working on my annotated bibliography, I will try to see if any other landmark articles/sources should be referenced in this section '''

Peer Review April 22nd, 2019
FGS Peer Review of Christina’s Queer Ecology

I will be reviewing Christina's article for her section on "Queer ecology". She is working on the second to last paragraph in the "Overview" section. I think that a lot Christina's implementations are good and in line for a solid Wikipedia article.

Original paragraph: “The first attempt at articulating a specific notion of queer ecology was in the May 1994 issue of UnderCurrents: Journal of Critical Environmental Studies titled “queer nature.” The editorial essay points out the “disruptive power of any examination of the normative categories of nature and the natural from the perspective of queer identity” and that “a politics of nature can no longer be an articulation of white, male, heterosexual prescriptive or descriptive privilege.”[8] In 2015, UnderCurrents released an update to their original groundbreaking issue, titled “From Queer/Nature to Queer Ecologies: Celebrating 20 Years of Scholarship and Creativity.” They also produced a podcast on the “pasts, presents, and futures of queer ecological scholarship” in coordination with the release of the issue.[9]”

Christina’s review: “I thought that her ideas about the claim being “the first” I think that claiming the May 1994 issue of UnderCurrents was the first mention of queer ecology could be false, thus I will read it and check up on the facts. I’ll probably change it to saying that it was “one of the first mentions”. Additionally, I will better describe what the UnderCurrents issue included rather than having that long confusing quote that doesn’t really make sense. I will also look into the other UnderCurrents releases and verify that the information written about them is correct. I will also add more information about those releases since they are just named and not really described Structurally, I will remove some of the wordiness from this section because it just adds to confusion rather than clarifying what is going on with the groundbreaking articles that were released. I also think that paraphrasing is the route I’ll take rather than including direct quotes from the articles mentioned. Moreover, I will look into whether there were other original pieces on queer ecology that haven’t been addressed, and add them in. While I am working on my annotated bibliography, I will try to see if any other landmark articles/sources should be referenced in this section”

Here are my suggestions.

Structure:
 * 1) Move the paragraph up to the beginning so that it becomes the first paragraph instead of the second to last. Since this paragraph includes the “first mention of queer ecology” I think it’d help non-scholarly readers understand the concept of “queer ecology” because it contextualizes “queer ecology” by describing it through a historical backdrop.
 * 2) As Christina mentioned, more details about the year the term was possibly conceptualized by dating the Undercurrents issue. The next paragraph transition deeper into the theory which would feel flowy after creating a framework around “queer ecology”
 * 3) Agree with intended changes to clarify the wordiness and quotation of the paragraph.
 * 4) Agree that paraphrasing is the way to go. Without quotations though, it’ll be important to expand on what the concept within the quotation means and how it relates back to the “Overview” section. Would highly recommend citing the paraphrasing

Lead that is easy to understand:
 * 1) At the start of this paragraph make sure to answer and give a clear definition of what the concept of queer ecology is so that it frames the “Overview” section more clearly.
 * 2) Make sure to be concise when expanding/explaining key terms
 * 3) Agreed with briefly giving some reference to when/what/who Undercurrents issue was published, what the journal tries to do, and who authored the section on “queer ecology”. This will further contextualize the term “queer ecology” for the reader. Maybe just a sentence or two about queer ecology being “possibly the first mention” or “one of the first mentions” by author ______ in Undercurrents issue ___ 19xx.
 * 4) Make sure that “queer ecology” links to the rest of the overview section.

Balanced Coverage: Briefly linking and explaining these terms will help create a balanced framework throughout the piece
 * 1) Agree with expanding on the updated version of the first Undercurrents issue called: “From Queer/Nature to Queer Ecologies: Celebrating 20 Years of Scholarship and Creativity” by putting in more context about why the issue was updated, and what the quotes mean.
 * 2) Make sure that Undercurrents doesn’t become the subject of this paragraph. Just using it to further explain “queer ecology” and frame what queer theory is
 * 3) Focus in on the concepts/ key terms behind the quotes and cite them, such as
 * 4) “Queer nature”? cite
 * 5) “Queer identity”? cite
 * 6) “Queer ecological scholarship”
 * 1) Maybe taking on the perspective of: How does queer ecology operate in the “cishetero” world? Is it apparent? Or does this phenomenon require the queer lens for it to be seen? In other words, can it only be understood through a queer lens?

Neutral Content
 * 1) Think this point is pretty solid. Maybe just make sure that this page can still be understood through a non-scholarly, and cishetero viewpoint
 * 2) Meaning really focusing on collapsing the “jargon” into everyday language
 * 3) Very good on this point overall, there are no direct opinions

Reliable Resources
 * 1) Agree with fact checking if “queer ecology” in the UnderCurrents: Journal of Critical Environmental Studies is viable.
 * 2) Good idea to try and find the exact page to where it mentions "queer ecology" and cite that. However, if the page cannot be found, maybe just reword the "first attempt" to "possibly the first attempt" or as she mentioned “one of the first attempts” so that the claim is more truthful and more viable.
 * 3) Good idea to cite/find more references to "Queer ecology" in Honnold library sources will be valuable and informational.

In summary, I thought that this review was good and had some solid points. Especially those concerning fact-checking and citations. Most of my suggestions have to do with thinking about how to connect this paragraph to the rest of the piece. Of course, this will ultimately depend on the other group member’s final paragraphs as well.

Now, I’d like to go over some important suggestions in this review. First, perhaps making this paragraph the opening paragraph (first) for the “Overview” section since it contains the “first mention of queer ecology”; I think would contextualize the piece and give the reader a better starting point than at trying to understand the “theoretical beginnings”. People might get tripped up just at the word “theory” alone. I also added in some suggestions about expanding on particular key terms and concepts that might be valuable to explain for readers, while also aligning with Christina's idea of removing the wordiness and awkward quoting. Again, this might also make it more accessible for readers who do not come from a theoretical or scholarly background. To end with, I thought Christina’s suggestions on structuring and citations will be key parts for making this part of the article great! I wish her good luck! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mgrant757 (talk • contribs) 06:55, 23 April 2019 (UTC)