User talk:Cruzgutierrez88/sandbox

Peer Review 12/9
This is a really interesting topic, and the article is shaping up well!

Wording/Content:


 * 1) Paragraph 1: consider linking the original article if able
 * 2) Paragraph 3: consider adding citation for the pathophys of the avulsion
 * 3) Paragraph 4: consider "pitching volume for young athletes" instead of "how much youth baseball players can and should be asked to pitch"
 * 4) Paragraph 5: consider changing "Instead, in adult athletes have a fused growth plate so ligaments and tendons become vulnerable" to "Instead, adult athletes have a fused growth plate, meaning that ligaments and tendons must bear the stress of the repeated throwing motion."
 * 5) Signs and symptoms: "Over time, these symptoms can show up whenever they throw no matter how fast" is a little unclear, consider some minor adjustments to something like "Over time, these symptoms can appear and reappear without warning, even when restricting the athlete to lower velocity pitching."
 * 6) Mechanism- pathophysiology: consider "at the bony elbow joint" instead of "at the bones of the elbow"
 * 7) Mechanism- pathophysiology: consider changing "whether it is because of delayed plate closure or widening or acute fracture" to "whether due to delayed plate closure, widening, or acute fracture"
 * 8) Diagnosis- Differential diagnosis: consider adding characteristic history and PE findings with citation
 * 9) Prevention: consider changing "To prevent Little League elbow should stay active and fit all year" to "In order to prevent Little League elbow, athletes should stay active and fit all year, with at least a 3-6 month break from throwing (per year?)"
 * 10) Prevention: consider changing i.e. catcher to e.g. catcher
 * 11) Epidemiology: consider adding the part about offspeed pitching to the prevention section as well

Style/Organization:


 * 1) Consider using the "Heading" and "Subheading" styles a bit more so that each section really stands out and looks more like a standard Wiki article with obvious delineation between sections under big, bold headings/subheadings, rather than just bold text.
 * 2) Your first section has some good, interesting history, so you could either put it under the History subheading you have, or you could just make that your intro, as it stands now.

Citation/Other:


 * 1) If there are any more articles or textboooks you can find that back up your claims/talk about this pathology, make sure to cite those since the article is a little citation-thin for now. Having a couple more articles will add to credibility, but overall your content is looking good from my perspective.
 * 2) If you can find some open source pictures of Little League baseball, Charlie Brown with the ailment, etc., you could include them (personally I couldn't, so no knock there).
 * 3) Nice work on linking to other Wikipedia articles, I need to go do that in mine.

Overall, the article is looking like it's coming along really well, and the content is solid. Excited to see the final product! Amalfred (talk) 16:40, 9 December 2023 (UTC)


 * One more quick thing: Make sure to put a heading-style "References" before your references section
 * I realize most of this is the fine-tuning, but there wasn't much to critique content-wise other than as mentioned above. Good luck! Amalfred (talk) 16:43, 9 December 2023 (UTC)