User talk:Cs4652/Neuroendocrinology

Plans for what to change:

go through suggested changes already on talk page gather sources to add necessary information review biophysics techniques that can be used to learn more about these systems Cs4652 (talk) 15:08, 19 October 2021 (UTC)

Inserted Citations into Pituitary section Cs4652 (talk) 00:19, 27 October 2021 (UTC)

Awesome edits! I especially love your figure that summarizes the hypothalamus' interaction with the pituitary gland. I also appreciated how you broke up the sections in a more logical way. (I looked at the old version of the wiki page). Overall, I'm very impressed by the number of details you added beyond just the mathematical models. One small thing that might be helpful is breaking up the models into actual sections so that the reader can easily jump down to the part of the article. Ae2526 (talk) 06:33, 19 November 2021 (UTC)

I like that idea! I went ahead and did it. Thanks! Cs4652 (talk) 18:05, 30 November 2021 (UTC)

I have a couple more suggestions for you as you finish up your project this week. I think it would be great if in your techniques section under electrophysiology you linked the wikipedia page to any of the people you talk about (if there is a wikipedia page), such as Barry Cross and Glenn Hatton. Additionally, I would love a couple more sentences on each of the models if you have time. I thought you presented about them a bit more thoroughly than what was included in the wikipedia article. Ae2526 (talk) 16:28, 6 December 2021 (UTC)

I looked for Wiki pages for both Barry Cross and Glenn Hatton to potentially link them to this page. There isn't a page for either of them. And I agree with you that I didn't expound very much on the mathematical models here, but I did that on purpose. Each model either has it's own page or is described more in detail on other pages for those who understand the differential equation details. I just tried to give a brief overview of how they work here and how they can be used to study these biological systems. Thanks for the suggestions! Cs4652 (talk) 01:36, 10 December 2021 (UTC)

AJ's Peer Review
Well done: Awesome work! I went through the previous versions of the wiki article and looked at what you have in your sandbox and changes that you already made to the published article. You have made many great improvements to the article. I like that you have moved around several paragraphs from the original article to organize the information in a way that is easier to understand, including adding the section header on major neuroendocrine axes, cleaning up all that was listed previously in a huge section for hypothalamus, and adding a section header for functions. The simplifications and smaller sections make it much easier to follow. You also added an entirely new, big section on experimental techniques that discusses electrophysiology and mathematical models that are used to study this topic. This is wonderful!

Questions/Suggestions: You didn't have anything in your sandbox about the history section of the wiki article that talked about pioneers and modern scope. I imagine this means you are planning to leave this section as it was originally, is that correct? At first I wondered if you were thinking of removing this section, and I was going to suggest that you leave it in the article because I think it adds some value. I also noticed that in the paragraph on functions, there is a place where it states a citation is needed and it may be be an observation from the writer. As you have studied this topic, have you come across any sources that could be used as a citation for the idea proposed there? Or do you know whether that is an idea that could be removed since it is not supported by the literature?

Very well done! You have helped the article a lot! It is very interesting and informative! --AJclarifies (talk) 04:18, 10 December 2021 (UTC)