User talk:Cungrmawi/sandbox

Aisha Torres Tul54161 (talk) 03:26, 29 October 2019 (UTC)

1. First, what does the article-draft do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way? The article draft does a good job of adding reliable sources. Something that impressed me was how the editor went in depth with the difference between raw vegan and vegetarian diet. (ex: raw vegetarians consume dairy products and eggs that vegans don't.) 2. Are there sections in the article that seem unnecessary? Is anything off-topic? With the field corn article there needs to be more than small grammar edits. Find citations and information that is needed. 3. Does the article focus too much on negative or positive information? Explain. The article does not seem biased or focused on too much negative or positive, it highlights important figures involved in the advocacy of raw foodism and definitions of raw vegan and vegetarian diets involved with raw foodism. 4. Does the article draw conclusions or try to convince the reader to accept one particular point of view? Are most statements in the article connected to a reliable source, such as textbooks and journal articles? Or do they rely on blogs or self-published authors? The article does not try to convince the reader to accept one particular point of view. The sources added are scholarly journals about raw vegan and organic diets. 5. Are there any changes you would suggest the author apply to the article? Why? Changes I would suggest if to read the field corn article again and look for where you can apply more information to a specific section/paragraph. Start with looking for citations that are needed and reading up on field corn. 6. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know! The information about certain diets can be applied to editing my own article about clean eating and appetite.

Thanks for the feedback! cungrmawiCungrmawi (talk) 03:22, 4 November 2019 (UTC)