User talk:CuriousDaily/sandbox

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Hi nice work so far. I have a few small suggestions to help you along with your edits--
 * Section titles
 * Ampersands not generally used, just spell out "and" instead
 * Should be in "sentence case" rather than title case. So instead of "Early life & Family", you should have "Early life and family"
 * When referring to a subject of a biography, per the Manual of Style, you should just refer to them by their surname. You shouldn't include honorific titles, as you have with "Miss Brehm". Referring to her as simply "Brehm" is the preferred method :)
 * Similarly, the "Dr." title is rarely used on Wikipedia ("Dr. A.P. Gouthey") unless it's part of a pseudonym or stage name (à la Dr. Dre, for example!)
 * Watch out for editorializing, no matter how slight! Instead of having read about 300 books from the Sunday school library when she was a mere child, it might be more encyclopedic and neutral to remove the adjective "mere" and just say "when she was a child".
 * I see that you are still in the process of adding citations, based on your notes, which is good!
 * In the Personal life and death section, there is an unpaired quotation mark in one of the sentences (distribution of funds to mission work for Mexicans")
 * You can fix the Speaker for the dead reference by using this link instead . It appears both the original link currently in use and the archive link are gibberish
 * I fixed the block quote that you tagged with "Block quote need fixing?"
 * You kill me with your adjectives! If only "snot-encrusted handkerchiefs" was encyclopedic--what vibrant articles Wikipedia would have!
 * There seems to be an incongruence with referencing? The reference Notes from the Medical Press is used to cite content about Brehm's appearance at the Cincinnati event. I don't see anything about the event in that reference--it seems to be mostly medical topics

I know you're still adding to this, but what an improvement it will be to the current article! Let me know if you have questions with any of the feedback--it's mostly minor formatting issues. Thanks, Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:30, 20 February 2019 (UTC)

Hi trying out this talk page business via a reply to you about my notes.
 * Section titles - got rid of ampersands & put in sentence case
 * Using "Brehm" without the "Miss"
 * Got rid of the "Dr." with Gouthey although I will mention that that was another editor's error which I copied over to my sandbox. Now I know.  If you're a real doctor, you don't get to use "Dr."  You can only use it if you're a fake doctor.  Interesting.
 * Editorializing. I admit it, I was aware that I shouldn't use "mere" in front of "child" but I thought it was more subtle than snot-encrusted and disgusting.  All fixed.  Please check the handkerchiefs paragraph to see if it seems OK now.
 * Fixed the unpaired quotation mark(distribution of funds to mission work for Mexicans") and expanded it to be a slightly longer quote.
 * Block quote that you fixed - Thank you!
 * Regarding this: The reference Notes from the Medical Press is used to cite content about Brehm's appearance at the Cincinnati event. I don't see anything about the event in that reference--it seems to be mostly medical topics
 * I added a second citation for you to see. Same citation but added some details to the second one.  I added the subtitle of the actual blurb.  And I made a note of "bottom of page 293" - does that help?  I could not figure out a way for the "cite this source" on JSTOR to lead to the correct page directly.  If second citation is better than first, I can delete the first one that was confusing.

STILL TO DO: HAVE NOT DONE BELOW YET, BUT WILL DO IT, THANKS: Thanks again! CuriousDaily (talk) 22:58, 26 February 2019 (UTC)CuriousDaily
 * Citations - yes, still need to add citation and some boring information (as well as some interesting stuff about William Jennings Bryan).
 * You can fix the Speaker for the dead reference by using this link instead . It appears both the original link currently in use and the archive link are gibberish