User talk:Cynthia.somai/sandbox

Shi Yi's Peer Review
Hi there!

Your article looks super promising with all the available facts and information you included in the outline. I like the use of the subheadings of "Reproduction" and "Metabolism" under the subheading "Physiology" however, I'm not sure if the "Reproduction" heading is needed as there are only a couple facts under it. Perhaps it may be better to combine those facts with the facts under "Physiology. Moreover, I feel like maybe the lead section should be contain a little bit more as it is a presentation of the rest of your article. It may be worth thinking to add a few more important points or elaborate a little bit on the board statements in that section.

I also found a database that may contain several images of pages from book sources regarding you organism.: http://fungi.myspecies.info/taxonomy/term/4996/literature#

The site mentions several interesting facts that could elaborate from what you have in the outline. It mentions that A. wentii is involved in Japanese soy sauce fermentation and production as well as bean preparation in Java. These facts could be added to your "Uses" subheading along with the other utilization facts. The source also contains a few specific metabolites that weren't mentioned in your article such as 5-Hydroxymethylfuran-2-carboxylic acid (Sumiki's acid) as well as the organism not being able to withstand dry heat or liquid heating (heating in milk). Maybe you could look further more into these facts to develop your article. These are just few suggestions I have in reviewing your article and really hope it has helped. Best of luck to you in writing the finals draft! :)

Deeana's Peer Review
Hello,


 * This was a very informative article and I think this is an amazingly detailed draft. It was very clear and you did not try to draw any conclusions with this article, they were just facts and the article remained neutral. There are a wide arrange of sources that are used quite equally throughout the article. I am very impressed with the history and the metabolism of the fungus. The way you have ordered the growth and morphology facts made it very easy to imagine what the fungus would look like. I enjoy reading about the metabolism and how the fungus performed in the lab and I think it is a good idea that you decided to put some relevant results in an indented point.
 * I like the division of the physiology into smaller subtopics and I think I would like to incorporate that into my article as well if possible
 * I think the lead section is very strong and I like descriptive it is about the properties of the fungus and also where it would grow and thrive. It briefly explains some characteristics that are further explained in the article
 * The order of the article sections is fine as it is, since it flows from one to the next.

Things to consider
 * The reproduction subsection is a little short, since it only has 2 points and there is repeated information of the fungus being asexual, maybe consider just putting that information with the rest of physiology
 * 4th point in taxonomy, the Smith and Raper names after the species names looked a little confusing but if that is how they are supposed to be written then never mind this point.
 * Conidial head part (point 8 and 9) is the only part that is a little confusing in growth and morphology since, there was a bit of repetition of conidial head but it was stating the same thing in a different way. When you proceed to write the article, maybe just take a look at the phrasing and maybe combine the two points in a more cohesive sentence so you don’t need to mention “vesicle” and conidial head twice.

Questions
 * Are the symptoms of NEO from A. wentii the exact same as NEO from pseudomonas aeruginosa? How does this fungus travel? Are the spores airborne and does it appear in mold of the food that way?


 * Here are some articles that you could consider as well:
 * Emodin, a Toxic Metabolite of Aspergillus wentii Isolated from Weevil-Damaged Chestnuts by John M. Wells, Richard J. Cole, Jerry W. Kirksey. Appl. Environ. Microbiol. Jul 1975, 30 (1) 26-28;
 * https://doi.org/10.1111/j.1365-2621.1980.tb04109.x

Lushiyi81 (talk) 03:56, 2 November 2018 (UTC)


 * Hi Shi Yi!
 * Thank you so much for sharing that website. I will be sure to include it along with the suggestions you gave in my final article. Your feedback was very helpful! Good luck working on your article. Cynthia.somai (talk) 01:37, 3 November 2018 (UTC)

Some suggestions

 * references and formatting look OK
 * excellent content
 * try to avoid pluralizing a Latin binomial, e.g., A. wentii’s...
 * a few more things you can probably link (e.g., country names, etc.)
 * Necrotising external otitis could be described in more common language and perhaps linked to the disease article


 * excellent job so far!

Medmyco (talk) 19:30, 17 November 2018 (UTC)