User talk:DDRfan/Dax-Devlon Ross (writer)

I am new to this, so forgive my ignorance. How should I format it in order for it not to be spammy? That was not my intention. I was just trying to include all the information I thought was pertinent. Thank you in advance! DDRfan 23:51, 2 January 2011 (UTC)
 * I'll leave the "helpme" tag because others will be able to help, but for a start:
 * read WP:Neutral point of view
 * read WP:PEACOCK
 * read WP:Verifiability: "This policy requires that all quotations and any material challenged or likely to be challenged be attributed to a reliable, published source"
 * work through your draft and when you come phrases like "a true man of letters", "a sought after speaker", "An inspiring memoir", "inspiring and challenging", "catalog of exciting projects", imagine a hostile critic looking over your shoulder saying "Who says so? Can you prove it?" If you don't have a good answer - a citeable reference from a reliable independent source - then take the puff-phrase out. Ask yourself that question for any adjective.


 * Don't address the reader, as in "You can interact with Dax.. " Generally, keep in mind that you are not trying to sell your subject, you are writing a dry, neutral, factual encyclopedic description. JohnCD (talk) 17:44, 3 January 2011 (UTC)

Thank you so very much! That is great info for me to know. I will make the necessary changes and keep trying til I get it right. I really appreciate your help! — Preceding unsigned comment added by DDRfan (talk • contribs) 19:28, 3 January 2011 (UTC)
 * You might also like to read WP:N and WP:RS. WP:CITE also has instructions for adding inline citations to help with verifiability. HJ Mitchell  &#124;  Penny for your thoughts?   19:38, 3 January 2011 (UTC)

I will definitely read those! Thank you!!! — Preceding unsigned comment added by DDRfan (talk • contribs) 19:40, 3 January 2011 (UTC)

I have made several edits as advised from the helpful editors above. If someone is available to further assist me, I'd appreciate it. I have removed all peacock language to make it more objective. Are there any other changes/edits you think I should make in order to better make this an approved article? Thank you in advance! DDRfan 03:17, 4 January 2011 (UTC)DDRfan
 * Some thoughts: do not link to outside websites in the middle of the article. Directly relevant external links go in the end "External links" section only. You don't need to say "More on both of these books very soon." This sentence is not necessary and still not neutral: "Both are fascinated by the changes the business has taken in that time, utilizing technologies and networking systems to help evolve how we process and view writing in the modern century, while sticking to what makes literature great: self-reflection, investigation, honesty and thoughtfulness. Whether the topic matter is basketball, global music, national politics, friendship, racial profiling or hallucinogens, these men spend time with their subjects." Don't use contractions ("It's" "who've" etc.) Especially for biographical articles, make sure there are as many sources/references as possible. For example "Upon graduation from SFS, Dax attended Rutgers University where he studied English, Spanish and Philosophy. Rutgers is also where Dax began his friendship with his publishing partner, Derek Beres. After receiving his under-graduate degree, Dax attended George Washington University Law School where he earned his Juris Doctor."--what reference(s) can verify this? / ƒETCH COMMS  /  03:25, 4 January 2011 (UTC)

Thank you so much!! I will continue to work on it and make your suggested changes. Again, thank you! DDRfan 03:34, 4 January 2011 (UTC)DDRfan — Preceding unsigned comment added by DDRfan (talk • contribs)

helpme I apologize for the repeated requests for help, but I just want to make sure I follow all of the guidelines to make this article approval-ready. If you have a moment, will you review my edits and assist me in any others I need to make in order to make it wiki-worthy? Thank you in advance for your assistance! DDRfan 16:42, 4 January 2011 (UTC)DDRfan


 * I still don't think that you've shown that this person is notable. Many of the references are not independent sources, and some of the pages cited as references do not even mention him. -- John of Reading (talk) 18:30, 4 January 2011 (UTC)

Thank you for your feedback. At this point, I am giving up. I specifically found references pertaining directly to him, but it appears they are not good enough. I don't know what else to do. Is there another site besides this one which will allow me to publish this article?DDRfan 18:38, 4 January 2011 (UTC)DDRfan


 * Just a polite note, when you have assisted a user with their help request, please add tl| to the helpme template (it should look like this: helpme ), or the help channel continues to think you still need help. Thanks  Barking Fish  19:23, 4 January 2011 (UTC)


 * @BarkingFish, if you're watching this page: As I said in my edit summary, I left the "helpme" in place so that other editors would comment.
 * @DDRfan: To get an expert opinion on whether your sources meet the notability tests, I suggest you post at Requests for feedback. -- John of Reading (talk) 22:27, 4 January 2011 (UTC)