User talk:DRHawes/sandbox

Tone
In the first sentence I would say the names of the systems you are going to cover ie. There are many types of orchard planting systems, each with its own characteristics. The two most popular systems are X and X.   Also you mention orchard design, type of tree (Central Leader) and planting systems. But the heading is orchard planting systems. Consider the heading, talk with your group and make your paragraphs more focused. Perhaps share information with another group member to include in their paragraphs. Bryantlib (talk) 02:45, 1 May 2018 (UTC)

Before making the paragraph 'live'
Remember to work with group members when uploading to the live page to ensure you dont upload the same information. Also consider how you will insert your information into the existing cider page. You may have to break up your sentences or not include everything depending on the information that is already on the page.

Proofread your paragraph before you make your information 'live'.

Before you post make sure one person in your group created a new section on the Cider apple talk page you are uploading to, letting the people watching the page know you are making edits. And also make sure you summarize your final change, when submitting to the live page. If you don't remember how to do these steps, re-watch the tutorial. :) Bryantlib (talk) 14:43, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Content
This is a good start, but I suggest adding in some information that is specific to cider apple orchards. In particular, I'd like you to make some comparisons between modern high-density systems and traditional and "Bush" orchards that are used in the UK.

I suggest looking at the books on reserve at Mann.

Also see:

"Cider Apple Growers Guide" by Liz Copas: https://newcatalog.library.cornell.edu/catalog/4396830

http://www.archiveofciderpomology.co.uk/archivereports/sustainableciderappleproduction7.2.4.pdf

https://pubs.ext.vt.edu/AREC/AREC-46/AREC-46.html

http://extension.wsu.edu/publications/pubs/fs141e/ — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ciderprof1 (talk • contribs) 15:40, 7 May 2018 (UTC)