User talk:Dalexandertom/sandbox

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Peer Editor: Tasmia Rahman Hello, I think that your contributions to the article were very well organized and provided a neutral stance on the topic of civic journalism. One area that I would improve on is, I would provide more specific detail. For example, in the section were you say “civic journalism has played a major role in the development of countries” I would include what countries you are specifically referring to. Additionally, I would consider adding more sources to your article to get more factual, accurate information. I would also consider adding more sources that are more current.Tasmia.r (talk) 18:46, 13 October 2020 (UTC)

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Hi Dalexandertom, Nice job on your draft! Here are just a few things I noticed that could potentially be improved on:) -In the second paragraph, you used the first-person plural perspective "we". I think it would be better to refrain from using "we" since it is ambiguous who you are referring to and by using this point of view it doesn't adhere to a neutral tone. In the same paragraph you also used the phrase "many also believe", which is also not neutral since you are providing a perspective on who the "majority" is rather than stating facts. I would suggest rephrasing these words to maintain a neutral point of view throughout your article. (In the last paragraph you also used "we"). -I also think it would be helpful if you separated the section about concerns under a new heading such as "Concerns about the future of civic journalism" or something along those lines. This structure may make it easier for readers to find what they are looking for. -You could also potentially add more to the concerns part of civic journalism. You touched upon the idea of "ethical concerns" and I think that could be elaborated upon. I hope this was helpful! H.Susanna (talk) 18:46, 13 October 2020 (UTC)

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Hi @Dalexandertom!

I think you have a solid starting point for your draft! It's clear, organized, and overall has a neutral POV. I really liked how you started to address the detrimental side of civic journalism, specifically in regards to the topic of ethics since it's becoming more prevalent as technology and social media are heavily involved in civic journalism as you mentioned. However, I think there could be more details and descriptions included in your draft since it's currently a little general. For example, you could possibly include some details about the specific concerns when it comes to ethics, such as privacy. Also, you could include headings in your draft for the various sections you're mentioning since it may be easier for readers to understand and navigate.--Lindseyjli3 (talk) 00:21, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

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Peer Editor: Haley Mendlin

I think your article is very interesting and you have a lot of great information. I think to improve your article, you should research this matter globally and include major articles and well-known sources. It is important to have supporting information and sources when making factual statements. I would also love to see pictures and graphics to improve your article, but overall it looks like you are off to a great start! Haleymendlin (talk) 02:40, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

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Peer Editor: Yifan Bao

Hello! Very nice job overall! Your article is very well organized and has a structure that is easy to follow. You have an unbiased and neutral stance on the issue of civic journalism. I also enjoy how you pointed out the potential ethical problems that can arise with the development of civic journalism. As for potential improvements, I believe your article could offer a more solid argument if more concrete examples are used.

For example, you mention "Civic journalism has played a major role in the development of countries by helping spur democratic transitions, encouraging economic growth, conducting public health campaigns, and imposing accountability of politicians[1]." Maybe it's a good idea to include concrete examples of how civic journalism led to democratic transitions: in what country and when?

Also, you mentioned that "The future of civic journalism is speculated to consist of privately owned, independent media." What's the driving force behind this change? Perhaps it would be helpful to explain the related social and cultural change that can provide as a context for the change in civic journalism. Specific and concrete examples would be really helpful.

Again, I really enjoyed reading your article. With all the suggestions you received from your peers, you could really do well on this project!Yifanbao1 (talk) 06:08, 14 October 2020 (UTC)Yifan Bao