User talk:DaltonKeen/sandbox

Feedback on 2nd draft

 * Absolutely no quotes should be used. Paraphrase or summarize.
 * History of marine engineering section is overly focused on engines rather than the engineering profession. Needs to be tied to growth of profession.
 * Inline citations missing
 * Break long paragraphs into smaller ones for easier reading online.

Michelev (talk) 19:29, 16 April 2014 (UTC)