User talk:DanDurbz/Blue-lined octopus

Peer Review
I really enjoyed reading about the lethality, its one of the more interesting facts about this species! I would suggest you breakdown your in-text citations, so you are not quoting 2-3 sentences with one source. I think it would interesting to add a anatomy section where you could further explain how the lethality works, it seems like you grouped a bunch of important anatomical structures in one sentence and you could definitely expand on that! Great references! EceYeldan0602 (talk) 19:54, 30 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Thank you for the feedback, I will work into breaking down these citations and adding an anatomy section to further explaining these anatomical structures.  DanDurbz (talk) 22:59, 20 November 2023 (UTC)

Peer Review
Done-Well


 * Nicely updated lead introductory sentence to make it more accurate & informative. Lead is concise.
 * All updated content makes information more accurate & informative, and is presented neutral. Uses a good variety of sources with recent research.
 * I like the way you went into detail about the tetrodotoxin, as well as the taxonomy/synapomorphy in the lead section. I may steal this and try to go into more detail about my species' taxonomy.

Improvements


 * Could use some sentences in the Lead briefly introducing article's major sections to give reader more general info.
 * The original author seems to have condensed lots of information into the Lead section. You could create a new section based on 'Characteristics' or 'Description' to move most of the current & drafted information from the lead to a more concise category.
 * Could possibly find more recent research (2008-2023) to make information more relevant.

Alyssabaldwin222 (talk) 18:16, 2 November 2023 (UTC)


 * Thank you for your feedback, I will work on adding to the lead to help point out major sections of the article and creating to sections to further expand upon certain topics that have a lot of valuable information. DanDurbz (talk) 23:02, 20 November 2023 (UTC)