User talk:DanaGhouse/Renée Watson

I'm having a hard time with the references. I'm trying to reuse the first reference, but it doesn't seem to be working Jgrant89 (talk) 23:03, 10 November 2019 (UTC)jgrant89

Hi all, looks like you added a lot. A few comments: -teaching-artist is a confusing phrase for me. It makes more sense later on in the article when its explained, but maybe reword it for the opening? -Personal Life heading - what about changing to Biography or something similar. It feels like a overview more than personal life - which makes me think of marriage, kids, current living location, etc. -Change YA to Young Adult since its the first instance of using it. -Do you have a citation for this line: Watson uses her books to help create relatable characters and to fight against stereotypes. -Since the writing section is small, perhaps selected works could go into that. -Perhaps move the I, Too, Arts Collective section up. Maybe after activism since they are somewhat related.

Great job! EmgriffUW (talk) 16:36, 17 November 2019 (UTC)EmgriffUW
 * Thanks for the feedback, We linked to the Wikipedia page for teaching artist for those who have not heard the term, moved up the I, Too, Arts Collective section and followed some more of your advice. We appreciate it! DanaGhouse (talk) 06:01, 2 December 2019 (UTC)
 * Thanks again ! You helped keep us on our toes for citations and got us thinking about the teaching artist term. We used many of your suggestions while editing. Rosie Dragon (talk) 06:05, 2 December 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review: Renée Watson

Lead evaluation: The user has contributed significantly to article, but new content has yet to be reflected in the lead. This may be due to continued resource gathering. The lead contains a concise introductory sentence describing the topic, and it is helpful to see a date of birth for the author. It is initially unclear what the added “teaching artist” descriptor means. It would be helpful to add a hyperlink to the existing Wikipedia article on the term for additional context. The lead is concise but does not yet contain descriptions of the article’s main sections, which is likely due to sections still being in development. The lead does not include information not present in the article.

Content evaluation: The added article content is directly relevant to the topic and significantly expands the scope of the article. The “bibliography” section now includes Watson’s most recent works and includes more thorough references. It would be helpful to provide citations to the author’s works or perhaps an authority file that can cross-verify the author’s works for added clarity. Additional content added shows the scope of Watson’s work, including work in the I, Too Arts Collective.

It would be helpful if the user added additional Wikipedia hyperlinks to topics discussed, such as for the unlinked “Hurricane Katrina” term.

There are a variety of external links in the body of the article that need to be reevaluated, as Wikipedia does not recommend including external links within the body of its articles. The hyperlink to “the Schools and Self Enhancement Inc” could fit better in an “External Links” section at the end of the article. “The external hyperlink “#LangstonsLegacy.” which directs the user to a Twitter page, should be removed from the body of the article, as social networking sites are not recommended for linkage. Other external links for revaluation in the body of the article include: “I Too Arts Collective,” “Black Like Me,” “Rethinking Schools,” and “DreamYard.”

Wikipedia guidelines regarding external links: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:External_links#What_can_normally_be_linked

Tone and balance evaluation:

Most of the content is balanced and neutral, but some content makes evaluation-based statements such as:

• Under “Activism:” “Watson uses her books to help create relatable characters and to fight against stereotypes. Amara in Some Places More Than Others is illustrated to be plus-sized intentionally, despite the fact that her weight doesn't factor into the plot.” ''This statement is unattributed. Did Watson state in an interview her intentions for the character? The first sentence contains the user’s conclusion of Watson’s goals (eg. Watson does x thing in order to get y result.). A later citation “First Draft Renee Watson” does not corroborate this statement. ''

• Under “Teaching:” “Adults also benefit from Watson’s teachings.” ''This statement makes a conclusion of Watson’s work: a favorable outcome (“benefit”) results from Watson participating in certain work. This statement should be reworded to be more neutral in tone.''

• Under “Activism:” “Using her education in Drama Therapy and her expertise as an educator and writer, Watson has run poetry and theater workshops that help children deal with traumas from various sources (from Hurricane to sexual assault victims and everything in between)”. ''It isn’t clear what “everything in between” means. This is the user’s assessment for what constitutes trauma. As an aside, it is clear “Hurricane” is a reference to Hurricane Katrina, but this is not stated here, so hurricane should not be capitalized as a proper noun.''

Sources and references evaluation: All content is backed up by reliable sources of information, except for the external hyperlinks noted above. Sources are current and draw information from recent publications. All links checked worked at the time of this evaluation.

Some content makes claims that cannot be attributed, such as:

Under “Writing:” “She writes books for young people as a way of teaching young people outside the classroom.” This statement is unattributed and is also the user’s evaluation.

Organization evaluation: For the most part, added content is well written, clear, and easy to read. Some added content needs additional polishing. There are run-on sentences and singular/plural noun and verb-tense agreement issues that should be reexamined for additional clarity and streamlining. A few sentences are overly wordy. Additional consistency is needed with the verb tenses of added content. A lot of content uses passive voice. New content is broken down into understandable sections and highlights the scope of Watson’s work. The section on “Writing” could be expanded to better explore themes of Watson's works, if appropriate resources are available. Otherwise, the second half of the section should be consolidated into “Contributions.” The section on “Personal Life” could remove Watson’s contributions to writing and these aspects could be added to the “Writing” section to better support the section overall.

Images and media evaluation: No images or media have been added at the time of this evaluation.

New Article Evaluation: This section is not applicable because the user is editing an existing article.

Overall evaluation: The added content significantly contributes the overall quality of the article, and this is especially true regarding a living person who has thus far contributed much to the field of children’s and young adult literature. The article is much more complete now and the added content shows the breadth of the author’s work in literature and social work. As noted above, additional citations could be added to verify the author’s existing works and external hyperlinks need to be removed from the body of the article. If an image of the author is available with appropriate licensing, it would be helpful to see what the author looks like for additional context.

Niortega (talk) 23:00, 17 November 2019 (UTC)


 * Thank you for your feedback! We followed several of your suggestions including adding an External Links section, changing the lead, revising to avoid bias, and editing once more was added. We found the birth date by contacting the author's representative and added that as well. We appreciate your feedback. DanaGhouse (talk) 06:01, 2 December 2019 (UTC)


 * Thank you for your work here. A lot of your suggestions went into the live article, including the External Links. You helped us a lot when it came to editing. Rosie Dragon (talk) 06:06, 2 December 2019 (UTC)