User talk:Dancer9d/sandbox

Feedback/Edits
Hi, I am here to give you some feedback on your Wikipedia article. I can tell that you have done a lot of research, and your articles do a great job of emphasizing your points about female offending. For your article, a title would be nice to clarify that the whole article is about female offending, since you cover several topics such as domestic violence gender roles. A few typos I noticed were that you don’t have to put a comma right before you write a citation in parenthesis, in the third paragraph you put “my help women escape” instead of “may”. Also, make sure you put titles of articles in quotes, and in the fourth paragraph you don’t need an apostrophe by the word violence in the first sentence. I hope this helps, you did a great job and your article will be a great contribution to Wikipedia!Amyellingsen (talk) 21:27, 23 November 2013 (UTC)