User talk:Danielle Adelaide/sandbox

Heidi Edits
Be mindful to use definitive, objective language. Also make sure you have subject/verb agreement. I like your use of examples in the first section. Did you mean to title your subsection "privative" instead of primitive? I would definitely try to add another subsection specifically about evolutionary hypotheses.

So far, good start!

From Ryan Lavoie
You have quite a few typos and awkward/incomplete sentences in your sandbox, too many for me to point out specifically at this point. Your first few sentences in the "Gender roles" section need to be sourced for each sentence I believe, not at the end. I'm not sure your second section necessarily has anything to do with your overall heading as well, it would be more appropriate in a section about more developed cultures' historical impacts on primitive cultures. This would also allow you to add a lot more room to write on specific contact events, and the history/effects of those. Back to the Gender roles section, your statements are very generalized, and would read much better if backed up with specific examples of that history (which could probably be broken down into subcategories of men-dominant vs women-dominant). Relavoie (talk) 00:47, 18 November 2017 (UTC)